kahlia'z+Biograhpy



Georgia O Keeffe Was a American artist, Born in a farm house near Sun Prairie Wisconsin. In The year 1887, November 15th, but unfortunately died March the 6th 1986. She was famous for painting flowers, rocks, shells, animal bones and landscapes. She often transformed her subject matter into powerful abstract images. In 1905 she enrolled at the School of the art institute of Chicago And in 1907 she attended the Art student’s league in New York City, where she studied under William Merritt Chase In 1908, she won the League's William Merritt Chase still-life prize for her oil painting //Mona Shehab She Had won a scholarship to// attend the League's outdoor summer school at Lake George In New York. While in the city in 1908, O'Keeffe attended an exhibition of Rodin's watercolors at the 291, Her Husband Alfred Stieglitz Was a photographer

In the autumn of 1908, she was discouraged with her work, Georgia did not return to the League but moved to Chicago and found work as a commercial artist. During this period, she did not pick up a paintbrush and said that the smell of turpentine made her sick. She became an elementary school art teacher near Canyon in the Texas Panhandle. She was inspired to paint again in 1912, when she attended a class at the University of Virginia Summer School, where she was introduced to the innovative ideas of Arthur Wesley Dow by Alon Bement. His teaching as well as that of Dow protégé Charles J. Martin strongly influenced Georgia O’Keeffe’s thinking about the process of making art. She was the first girl and the second of seven O'Keeffe children. O'Keeffe's mother made her and her sisters attend art classes. Because her parents believed she did well, they suggested she attend art school.Her parents, Francis Calyxtus O'Keeffe and Ida Totto O'Keeffe,


 * //Thanks Kahlia. A good first effort here.// //I think this is a Level 3 Biography// (Have a look at the matrix on the biography page)

//In terms of next steps for writing a biography, I think you need to consider the following://

Purpose:** You have provided quite a lot of deatil about the artist and her influences. To make it a Level 4 you'd have needed to explain why she is significant enough to warrant attention.
 * Text Organisation:** Your organisation of the text has let you down a little. It is well sequenced on the whole but then you've added information about her family and siblings at the end that really should've gone at the start. You've used paragraphs, but the sentences start in funny places and the paragraphs don't always group similar information. This and a conclusion is your next step.
 * Language Features**: Capitals! They're all over the place as are fullstops, this really warrants a Level 2! Equally sentences have been split (onto a new line) mid sentence, this makes it very difficult to follow.