Brittany's+Biography

Janet de Wagt Janet was born in Ashburtion she working artist for 20 years - combining my painting with living and travelling in different parts of the world the paintings were exhibited widely in Britain - and some were made into postcards, a truly wonderful medium people to enjoy paintings without having to spend a lot of money Since her arrival back in New Zealand in 1996,

Janet has inspired me to do landscapes because I love her work and the paintings that she does so I wanted to do some thing like hers .I really enjoy doing her work because it is really fun and I think that although we are the art based class and we are not like the other class rooms or schools that how much that I have learnt from her that I would have done the same as everyone else I a normal class rooms overall I think that she is her own artist because she does not copy anybody else work and that she is a hard working lady


 * //Thanks Brittany. A good first effort here.// //I think this is a Level 2 Biography// (Have a look at the matrix on the biography page)

//In terms of next steps for writing a biography, I think you need to consider the following://

Purpose:** Brittany a good example of needing to go back to the marking schedule and look at what you're being asked to do. The first paragraph is all I can mark as part of the biography and I'm sure you'll agree that it contains limited information about Janet's background. I was disappointed that you girls did not interview her since she is on site - this would have given you first hand information. Next step: Include information about education and major life accomplishments, contemporaries and significance (must explain why this individual is worthy ofnote in their field of expertise.)
 * Text Organisation:** There is not really enough here for me to make a judgement on this. I can see that you separated the paragraphs to reflect the change in information (talking about Janet and then you).
 * Language Features**: This really lets you down. The tense is changing, as is the author (are you writing this or Janet?) Sentences don't make sense and finish mid sentence. (L2)